Distance fades
21 December 2015
(This poem was originally written as a Shadorma under the title “The fading Times’ cuts” and I then reworked similar ideas into a different form called Tetractys transposing it into a double Tetractys as figures below)
I
Clasp firm
Your memories
Ghosts of future
Relentless the fading Time cuts through us
We carve souls in handwritten book of faith
Through stolen thoughts
Distance fades
Heartbeats
Sing
Breathe – The White Birch
I could not catch you what you say about Shadorma and Tetractys
I am new to poetry writing, I confess.
Would you be able to explain what these styles of poetry writing.
This has really come well and I am inspired.
Shiva
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Thank you Shiva. In the menu on my blog under Shadorma and Tetractys you have the definition of what they are and how to write them 🙂
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Ok ! I shall see to them.
Thanks!
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Welcome and I look forward to seeing what you write
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All your inspiration my Dear Geetha!
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Thank you 🙂
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Oh, wow. That sounds amazing! 🙂
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🙂
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Beautiful transformation, Geetha! It’s amazing how you rewrote a Shadorma into a Tetractys. I love it! 🙂
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Thank you Annie! It was aided by the fact that when the thoughts originally came they were spilling out in between the two forms alternatively 🙂
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I meant to reply to this comment – darn iPhone! It’s amazing how your thoughts already have a form – two, for that matter! 🙂
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Yes, the funny thing is I actually just feel it flowing, most of the time like a song in my head. Maybe that is why I only write in styles that evoke rhythm for me. Sometimes while the thoughts in my mind are flowing they switch gears so to speak between different rhythms. The flowing sensation started after I made a habit of inventing funny chess puzzles in my mind and kept adding pieces or changing the set up. I know this sounds dorky but that’s how the whole flowing thing with poetry happened 😀
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That’s really magical! You make it sound so effortless! 🙂
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I think that when you connect to your heart it becomes so
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I love this, subtle reworking of the earlier piece. I wish I knew a little more about poetic styles and construction. Sometimes I feel like the “handy man” of poetry. 😉
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Thank you Eric. I discover these myself as the only forms I knew before beginning my blog were sonnet, Alexandrin and a couple more forms related to French poetry. The rest I picked up while blogging. Shadorma thanks to Thomas a few weeks ago and Tetractys a couple of days ago thanks to Annie. It’s fun to try new styles to express oneself and sometimes you find that some poems flow better in a form that you might not have thought of before. I am loving the broader horizons. You should really try. In any case you’re not the handyman, you’re the knight 🙂
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You are such a sweet person to say so. I’d be honored to have a title like that. I’ve always put it on my list to learn more about poetry styles. Perhaps I’ll get to it in the new year.
Thank you for the smile, Geetha.
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Welcome Eric, I think it sits well with you 🙂 . Please do come up with some writing in various poetry styles, I am sure you will live the experience and we will love your output 🙂
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oh, I also nominated you for an award 🙂
https://hooklineandinkwell.wordpress.com/2015/12/21/sisterhood-of-the-world-bloggers-award/
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Thank you. I don’t usually do awards as I am not really sure what purpose they serve but did nominate you as well because Tosha had nominated me for the Dragon loyalty award. It was in the post Dragons in heart 😀
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You are welcome! It’s more to tell you how much I appreciate and respect your work. You are not under any pressure to accept and post 😀
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beautifully written… I first saw this form on Annie’s (What the Woman Wrote) blog and have it on my to do list to write 🙂
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Thank you Thomas. You should definitely use it. I think it will become you. When I first saw it on Annie’s blog I was quite impressed and then I saw a few other poems too and was definitely conquered. I have written two now in the form toying first with a single Tetractys and now with the double. The more we expand the forms in which we can express ourselves the more I feel our capacity of expressing ourselves in more forms grows. It’s really quite thrilling 🙂
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You are welcome…i will give it a try soon 😀
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